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Forests and Gravity: Gabriel's Side

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Today was the day.  He was going to introduce Breeny to Gregory.  She had noticed something different with his attitude and had been excited to find out who had turned him around.  Now he was ready to introduce her to probably the best influence in his whole life.
“Okay, you ready to meet my role model?”  He was so excited.  The two people that meant the most to him were going to meet face to face for the first time.
“Sure.”  Gabriel watched as the girl’s face lit up with excitement, but it fell as soon as they turned into the woods.
It was a short trip before Gabriel stopped in the middle of a dense set of trees.  He sat on an old log and motioned for Breeny to sit next to him.  He was confused when she didn’t.
“Gabe, are you sure this is where you’re friend is going to meet us?”  He nodded while he looked around.  “Don’t you think this is kind of strange?”
He wasn’t quite sure what she meant.  “No.  This is where we usually meet.”  He couldn’t understand what was up with Breeny right now.  “You don’t have to be scared.”
“I’m not scared!”  Gabriel jumped back at her tone.  She had never been like this before.
“Breeny, chill.”  He wanted to comfort her, but how do you comfort a girl in the middle of the woods without freaking her out more?  Suddenly he heard a noise.  He smiled.  “Good.  He’s here.”
He watched Breeny tense up as Gregory came into view.  It took her a few seconds before she screamed.  Gabriel’s heart dropped to the very pit of his stomach.  It almost hit the leafy ground when she started running.  He looked at Gregory, apology written all over his face, before he had to bolt off after his friend.  He found her laying on the ground, sobbing.  He didn’t know how to handle this.  He had never seen her like this, ever.
“Breeny,” he said softly lifting her up and cradling her in his arms, “talk to me.”  He felt how badly she was shaking.  “Breeny,” he whispered, “what is wrong?”
Bwahahaha!  I'm terrible.  I had to write two third-person point of views that were central consciousness (or something like that).  I wrote three and they totally are totally revolved around the same event, but from the third-person limited perspective of Gabriel, Breeny, and Gregory (aka the Boogy Man).  My plot slowly thickens with each view point.  And now we're working on a 3,000 word story which will hopefully take up where this leaves off.  I'm still really inexperienced in writing, so I apologize for if it isn't good.
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